stoner haiku
Moderator: Balou
stoner haiku
easy 5-7-5 syllable format
thumbnail flecks my hash
tight heap of potent lung snack
happy orange glow
coots squeak as they ply
reflections on lijnbaansgracht
my second city
basjoe chance meet up
red flickering table lights
cozy oasis
thumbnail flecks my hash
tight heap of potent lung snack
happy orange glow
coots squeak as they ply
reflections on lijnbaansgracht
my second city
basjoe chance meet up
red flickering table lights
cozy oasis
Re: stoner haiku
Great idea! Liked the Basjoe one!
A 3-5-3 for you:
Frosted exhale
Caresses my face-
Stoned again.
I'll come back to this when I've thought of some more! 2-3-2's will be a challenge!
A 3-5-3 for you:
Frosted exhale
Caresses my face-
Stoned again.
I'll come back to this when I've thought of some more! 2-3-2's will be a challenge!
Wash yerself up quick, babe. Star Trek's on.
Re: stoner haiku
Actually I like this one of yours best. Evocative image!Nimrod wrote:easy 5-7-5 syllable format
coots squeak as they ply
reflections on lijnbaansgracht
my second city
Wash yerself up quick, babe. Star Trek's on.
Re: stoner haiku
Love it , used to be right into a haiku or two back in my Beat days (dunno if I was sticking to the syllable count though)
Can't remember any of the top of my head , will have to speak to my mate ! Mm maybe time to pull out a book of Kerouac haikus !!
Can't remember any of the top of my head , will have to speak to my mate ! Mm maybe time to pull out a book of Kerouac haikus !!
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Re: stoner haiku
Cisco wrote:It has to be 17 syllables to be a haiku is that right ?
Japanese phrasing demands 5-7-5 to match it's linguistic peculiarities. In english they're either done 5-7-5 or 3-5-3 or 2-3-2 due to the relative ease of being hyper succinct in english compared to japanese. In any event they're not strict. Basho varied his syllable count quite a bit - it's the evocative nature of the image painted that counts!
Wash yerself up quick, babe. Star Trek's on.
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Oh and you're supposed to ideally show somehow what season you're in and the last line should be able to stand on its own as well as going with the first two!
Wash yerself up quick, babe. Star Trek's on.
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^^ nice one cheers for that , I hope I can , or my mate can remember some of ours , I just remember they were funny as fuck maybe not so now though
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brass hand boob in bricks
red light frames the foreign flesh
where is my wallet
eat from the wall choice
grillburger blows eskimos
should have passed on that
tram bell dingaling
coughing out a huge bong rip
sounds of amsterdam
oliebollen stand
fried dough met powdered sugar
eighty euro cents
red light frames the foreign flesh
where is my wallet
eat from the wall choice
grillburger blows eskimos
should have passed on that
tram bell dingaling
coughing out a huge bong rip
sounds of amsterdam
oliebollen stand
fried dough met powdered sugar
eighty euro cents
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Pressing paunch
On icy glass-
Troll bypassed.
On icy glass-
Troll bypassed.
Wash yerself up quick, babe. Star Trek's on.
Re: stoner haiku
ducks squat half sunk boats
tourists toil on canal bikes
sunny window cat
chipkaart in pocket
umbrella under my arm
mokum october
red bricks and loose sand
dark gray slabs line the dutch streets
shoe full of dog shit
tourists toil on canal bikes
sunny window cat
chipkaart in pocket
umbrella under my arm
mokum october
red bricks and loose sand
dark gray slabs line the dutch streets
shoe full of dog shit
Re: stoner haiku
"Nimrod" you're a natural!!!
Thanks for all the explanations "CannaSir" Gotta have a go, but i keep running out of fingers and forgetting were i am.
Dig out some of the past efforts "Cisco"!! ....and give us some new ones. "CannaSir" said it should tie in with the seasons, so i'm going with plenty of pissing rain!!
Got to have a think about this. Bet it would be easier when heavily stoned!!!
Thanks for all the explanations "CannaSir" Gotta have a go, but i keep running out of fingers and forgetting were i am.
Dig out some of the past efforts "Cisco"!! ....and give us some new ones. "CannaSir" said it should tie in with the seasons, so i'm going with plenty of pissing rain!!
Got to have a think about this. Bet it would be easier when heavily stoned!!!