An ode to amsterdam

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gsutoker
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An ode to amsterdam

Post by gsutoker »

http://neal.bandcamp.com/

In case you didnt realize, this is a bit of self-promotion. But Ive uploaded a song about amsterdam that ya might enjoy. Listen, enjoy, and then critique me please.


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Marco
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Post by Marco »

First up, big ups for putting yourself up!

Likes: I like the beat, the sound the vocalist (is that you?) sound tight. Is that a pure voice or through Autotune?

The rhyme starts out ok....but I think you need to tighten it up....make it harder. Too many details, if that makes sense.

Add some stuff about the city, not just the weed and smart shops. Get some place names in there.

Mad respect!
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Post by gixxer »

sorry m8, i only managed to last for about 5seconds, the moaning did it for me

not my kind of music at all
RIP Lee Rigby

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gsutoker
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Post by gsutoker »

Yeah thats my voice... The only part that hit any autotuning would be where the chorus drops out.
So thanks on that part (I am really subconscious about my voice for some reason)

What do you mean too many examples? I want to know so I can make it better. And the only way to get better is through criticism and practice.
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