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easy 5-7-5 syllable format

thumbnail flecks my hash
tight heap of potent lung snack
happy orange glow

coots squeak as they ply
reflections on lijnbaansgracht
my second city

basjoe chance meet up
red flickering table lights
cozy oasis

Great idea! Liked the Basjoe one!

A 3-5-3 for you:

Frosted exhale
Caresses my face-
Stoned again.

I'll come back to this when I've thought of some more! 2-3-2's will be a challenge!

Huddled
Against winds-
Spliff's lit!

Nimrod wrote:easy 5-7-5 syllable format

coots squeak as they ply
reflections on lijnbaansgracht
my second city

Actually I like this one of yours best. Evocative image!

Love it , used to be right into a haiku or two back in my Beat days (dunno if I was sticking to the syllable count though)


Can't remember any of the top of my head , will have to speak to my mate ! Mm maybe time to pull out a book of Kerouac haikus !!

It has to be 17 syllables to be a haiku is that right ?

Cisco wrote:It has to be 17 syllables to be a haiku is that right ?

Japanese phrasing demands 5-7-5 to match it's linguistic peculiarities. In english they're either done 5-7-5 or 3-5-3 or 2-3-2 due to the relative ease of being hyper succinct in english compared to japanese. In any event they're not strict. Basho varied his syllable count quite a bit - it's the evocative nature of the image painted that counts!

Oh and you're supposed to ideally show somehow what season you're in and the last line should be able to stand on its own as well as going with the first two!

^^ nice one cheers for that , I hope I can , or my mate can remember some of ours , I just remember they were funny as fuck maybe not so now though

brass hand boob in bricks
red light frames the foreign flesh
where is my wallet

eat from the wall choice
grillburger blows eskimos
should have passed on that

tram bell dingaling
coughing out a huge bong rip
sounds of amsterdam

oliebollen stand
fried dough met powdered sugar
eighty euro cents

Classic Nimrod where's my wallet ? Rofl

Hash good.
Weed and Hash
Better!

Pressing paunch
On icy glass-
Troll bypassed.

ducks squat half sunk boats
tourists toil on canal bikes
sunny window cat

chipkaart in pocket
umbrella under my arm
mokum october

red bricks and loose sand
dark gray slabs line the dutch streets
shoe full of dog shit

"Nimrod" you're a natural!!!

Thanks for all the explanations "CannaSir" Gotta have a go, but i keep running out of fingers and forgetting were i am.

Dig out some of the past efforts "Cisco"!! ....and give us some new ones. "CannaSir" said it should tie in with the seasons, so i'm going with plenty of pissing rain!!

Got to have a think about this. Bet it would be easier when heavily stoned!!!